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Re: It's getting ridiculous!
5/29/2006 11:48 AM
Adam Thomson (806) wrote:
Adrian, I haven't seen what WN members have been saying about your writing so I don't know whether you are right to be annoyed or not. But two things strike me about your style.
The first is that your sentence construction doesn't look natural. It sometimes gives the impression that English is not your first language(maybe it isn't, I have no idea).
Stop to think about this phrase, for example: "So I hope that wholenoters will post info about the message I am trying to come across in my message".
The second part of that sentence just doesn't sound like a phrase a native English speaker would construct.
To take another from your message that started this thread: "I have little social skills". That sounds weird to me - like a French person trying to speak English. Shouldn't it be "I have few social skills"? This is not a criticism just an observation.
The second point is that your use of less-common words sometimes looks a little forced - as if you are writing with the thesaurus next to you. That's not necessarily bad but I guess it explains why your style has turned heads here.
You clearly care about writing and even seem to enjoy it. But the challenge of writing well (if you care) is to communicate ideas clearly and economically. In that sense less is often more (just like in music). Flashy words may be flashy but the result is often less than pleasing and can often even confuse the meaning.
The "they think I have scanty friends" phrase got me thinking. The first thing I thought was that people here thought that your friends were "scanty" ie. small and thin. It's not necessarily wrong but it is ambiguous. Maybe a simple word like "no" or "few" might have been better.
Above all, though, don't worry about the criticism. My experience here at WN has been very positive, and people have been incredibly friendly, helpful and fun (oops, except when I started a thread saying that I thought Eric Clapton lacked soul and was boring).
In any event, I am sure everyone here would agree that wholenote is a more interesting place with your posts than without them. So keep on typing, bro.
And thanks for the clips at soundclick. Kevin's right: you've got some mean fingerpickin' goin' on there.